Welcoming Ramadhan
Welcoming Ramadan
There are some activities and traditions in my hometown that I love to do before Ramadan comes. Firstly, I will visit my relatives and neighbors. This is time to asking forgiveness and bring them some cakes. The second is helping my mom to cooking Rendang, it is bonding time for both of us. The next is cleaning home with my siblings, we also have a chit chat while cleaning home. The most fun activity is go to the river with relatives and friends to take a bath a day before Ramadan, we not only go there for bathe but also eat together in the rice fields or riverside. All activities above are contain togetherness which creates memorable experience that I always like to do before Ramadan comes.
Hallo Intan Zanofani, i am very excited to read your essay. Happy fasting for u and all moeslim in the world, i am so happy and appreciate you to make it this essay. But for more better if you put the controlling ideas, because i see your essay is more in supporting ideas but i don't know what is your controlling ideas. Also i think that your essay is like conclusion. But overall is very good, thank you
BalasHapusWhat a great things that you can do in Ramadhan. you can delivery it nicely into sentences. But, it would be nice if you make the topic sentence and supporting sentence clearer. Because if i see your topic sentence, it is not related with your conclusion sentence. and your supporting sentence is not clear whether it is major supporting sentence or minor supporting sentence. keep it up the good work and good luck, Intan!
BalasHapusHello intan i also love Ramadhan
BalasHapusAlso i like your story i can relate it to what usually have done in past ramadhan 👏
Hai intan, happy fasting for you. It's a good story. But it would be clearer, you can put the number on your sub topics such as "the first is...., the second is... And so on". Good job girl!
BalasHapushey I love your story... happy fasting :)
BalasHapusgreat story intan, maybe you can add more information to support your ideas because i think its to short
BalasHapusIt was such a nice activities! I think it would be better if you make the topic and supporting sentence clearer. Happy fasting!
BalasHapusWhat a great paragraph! I suggest to adding more explanation on the conclusion. Good job girl:)
BalasHapusHappy Fasting!
BalasHapusIts a good story. Happy Fasting!!
BalasHapushi intan, it was a very good story and it was easy to read. i enjoyed when i was reading it. my sugestion is i hope you can make it longer so i can enjoy more of your story <3 overall, ypur essay is amazing. Happy Fasting !!!
BalasHapushappy fasting intan, i hope you more more happiness hehe from your article i read, maybe its better if you can add more information to support your ideas
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BalasHapusThere are some activities and traditions in my hometown that I love to do before Ramadan comes. Firstly, I will visit my relatives and neighbors to asking forgiveness and bring them some cakes.This is generation to generation tradition that still maintained until today and I always feel excited to do this tradition because I can get in touch directly with closest people around me. The second one is helping my mom to cooking Rendang, it takes long time until cook perfectly, so this is bonding time for us because of we have limited time to spend together. The third one is cleaning home with my siblings, we are help each other, we also have a chit chat and I feel thankful to have siblings like them because they always teach me anything that very useful for my future and I enjoy every lesson and story they tell to me. The last one is the most fun activity which is go to the river with relatives and friends to take a bath a day before Ramadan, this tradition called Balimau. On this moment, We are not only go there for bathe but also eat together in the rice fields or riverside. Walk on the rice fields together, bathing in the river together, and eat accompanied by sounds of nature together with friends is memorable activities for me before Ramadan comes. My loveable activities to do before Ramadan comes are spending time with my friends and family through those four activities. I have rare time to be spended with them, that is why I very enjoy these activities and traditions to welcoming Ramadan because it help me to create a bonding time with them. I love togetherness so I enjoy every occasion to spending time with my family and friends.